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This was the night. Lisa was determined in finding out who the cookie thief was once and for all.

For weeks, after dinner, her mother would put exactly twenty-three oatmeal and coconut cookies in the jar. In the morning, however, when Lisa was going to get two for school, the jar was emptier. It was never the same number of stolen cookies consecutively (she made a log about it); sometimes the thief took three, another seven, another four, at times even just one.

At first she thought she would miscount the number of cookies her mother would bake, or that someone was playing a joke on her and sneaking them out before she could notice. Many nights she stayed up long after everyone had gone to sleep, but never saw anyone. She would wait from half an hour to three hours, until she couldn't keep her eyes open and went to bed.

She spent her lunchtime studying the notes in her log, and discovered she had not checked between three in the morning and just before dawn. That night she'd go to bed and wake up exactly at 2:57 and sneak downstairs.

The soft chirps of her alarm woke her up. She put on her slippers, took her binoculars from the night table, went out of her room, and went halfway down the stairs, where the perfect view of the jar was available. No one was around. 2:29, it wasn't time yet. She could hear the snores from her parent's room muffled by the door. Her watch said three. Nothing moved, no sound disturbed anyone's sleep, not even the wind seemed to be awake. Minutes went by without any commotion. Lisa looked at the cookies with her binoculars- the lid was as it had been, and the cookies were all the way to the top.

She was going to turn away when she saw it.

The shape was almost imperceptible, she could hardly see it, but it was there, the form of what she could only identify as a…

“Ghost,” she whispered, lowering the binoculars with a trembling hand.

As quiet as she had descended, she went back up, never taking her eyes away from the ghost, every second more visible, taking cookie after cookie and eating them.

The next morning she ran to her mother’s room.

“Mom! Mom! A ghost! In the kitchen! Last night! Cookies!” Her eyes were red from not sleeping, yet they were wide open as if the ghost was still around.

“Well of course, sweetie. Did you think they didn’t go hungry from time to time?”
FFM #2!

Day two of this awesome month!

Today's story was inspired by dinabelenko's "Midnight Cookie Theft", submitted as image prompt. Thanks! :D
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Given 2016-07-18
Midnight Snack by mimi-lolacute features a character with a strong, fun voice, a mystery desperately needing to be solved, and the perfect pacing to keep the reader on the edge of their seat. ( Featured by brennenxr )
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PoutySprouts Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2016  Professional Artist
that minute when you design your avatar and author tag in MS paint, with MS paint fonts. LOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOL.
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mimi-lolacute Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
Um, no, but ok.
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PenguinTranquilizer Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2016  Hobbyist Photographer
Congrats on the DD! :la:
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mimi-lolacute Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! :la:
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PenguinTranquilizer Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2016  Hobbyist Photographer
You're welcome!
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2016  Hobbyist Writer
-gasp- I've been discovered! Oh well, time to bail!
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mimi-lolacute Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
Gotcha! :P
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2016  Hobbyist Writer
Ah ha ha ha! Foolish fool, you can't catch a ghost! :WooBoo:  
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mimi-lolacute Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
Tell that to Ghost Busters ;)
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2016  Hobbyist Writer
Who you gonna call? :lol:

*cue Ghostbusters theme*
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BornWithTheSun Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2016  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, I had wondered why Lisa's mom made so many cookies every night. Gotta keep all of the residents full, I guess. :) Lovely ending!
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mimi-lolacute Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
Now you know if your mother cooks a bit extra who it is for ;)

Glad you liked it :)
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BornWithTheSun Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2016  Hobbyist Writer
:jawdrop: She did make a bunch of extra cookies yesterday... Maybe I should be scared.

Thank you for sharing! And congrats on the DD! :)
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mimi-lolacute Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
Not scared, maybe curious and alert ;)

Thank you for reading :D :hug:
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BornWithTheSun Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2016  Hobbyist Writer
Of course! :)
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LadyBrookeCelebwen Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, this is awesome! I love that it's a ghost. Congrats on the D! :D
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mimi-lolacute Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! :D

By the way, just noticed your avatar, so cute :love:
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Steve-C2 Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2016
I admit I didn't know what to expect from this, and I certainly wasn't expecting the end.  You did a great job with the surprise at the end.

I know from experience that children do notice a lot.  And I got a laugh out of this because based on my own experience, the thought that a child would notice the absence of a single cookie from a jar is absolutely spot on and definitely realistic.

The ending was another pleasant surprise.  The girl is shocked that a ghost would be eating cookies, and the mother's reply is just as though having ghosts eat cookies is an everyday, ordinary thing.  They do get hungry after all!

This was a pleasure to read.  Thank you for sharing it.
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mimi-lolacute Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you for your feedback and for reading :)

I'm happy you enjoyed it, that's the goal :aww:
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sakpalamey Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2016  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
It can't be the ghosts. Santa is known to do that during the off season.
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mimi-lolacute Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
Then maybe Santa is the ghost dun dun duuun
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rex-raxon Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2016  Student Digital Artist
Congratulation Clap
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mimi-lolacute Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks! :D
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Bomberhead67 Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2016
A fun light read.
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mimi-lolacute Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
Glad it was :)
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killersprinkles Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2016  Hobbyist Artist
I loved this!! Great job!
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mimi-lolacute Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you :D
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Lintu47 Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2016  Hobbyist Photographer
Congrats on the DD! :DALove: by Ikue
Have a nice day! :love: by CookiemagiK
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mimi-lolacute Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you :D

You too :hug:
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Lintu47 Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2016  Hobbyist Photographer
My Pleasure (1) by daniya-ART Thank You (16) by daniya-ART
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LindArtz Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your much deserved DD!
Congrats on DD By Marphilhearts by LindArtz
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mimi-lolacute Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks so much, this is quite the surprise :D
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TheSkaBoss Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2016  Hobbyist Writer
hehehehehe yay she is so thoughtful to the ghosts :la:
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mimi-lolacute Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
Right? Who would have thought :D
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NamelessShe Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2016
I wasn't expecting that! :D
And Lisa is adorable.
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mimi-lolacute Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
I wasn't either :P
She makes me think of a young Ana, now that I think about it lol
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ilyilaice Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2016
Her mother's reaction though. Liked this story a lot. :la:
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mimi-lolacute Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
Yay! I'm glad :la:
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bookcrusher Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2016  Student Writer
Aha, cookie thieves. I really love the last line, well done..
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mimi-lolacute Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you :)
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exhale-the-stars Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2016  Student Writer
That was a fun, little mystery. I felt that the last line really rounded out the whole story well.
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mimi-lolacute Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks :D
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Ag-Cat Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
Those tricky cookie thieves! I'm going to catch them one day. CURSE YOU! 
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mimi-lolacute Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
I'll join you for the hunt!
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